So enjoyable from the very beginning, although once I realized the narrator was a dog in dire circumstances I wasn’t sure I could keep reading. 😭 So many lines to love, like this one: “It’s hard to make an impression on a world that seems only to value its own particular definition of perfection.” It reminded me of a book I loved as a child, “The Incredible Journey.” A bold choice, lovingly done.
What a beautiful, layered tale of perseverance and courage. I love that you've taken on the perspective of a mother dog, and that she's led on her heart's journey by the other beings of the world. These paragraphs are filled with such lovely descriptions of the non-human world, which only make the human one feel even more bleak. Really well done.
This was such a treat, so many beautiful moments; one favourite line :"just enough blue sky to make a pair of sailor’s trousers." I would love to see the prompt, and I would happily read much more of the same!
I’m charmed by the originality and the echoes of a lifetime of children’s tales and children’s hearts, too somehow. What a creative contribution to this collection. Apologies for coming to it so late. I am still working my way - carefully- top to bottom. A pleasure to find yours.
The repetition of the forest animals saying "It’s the shortest day today and there’s hardly any light so you’d better be on your way" gave it the feel of a charming children's book, but with so much more detail and depth. Lovely story, well done!
“She smiled so widely it was possible to imagine falling into such kindness and staying there forever.” One of my favorite lines. I also loved “just enough blue sky to make a pair of sailor’s trousers.”
Lovely choices here! Glad this project brought me to your work. And I’d be curious to see the prompt.
I love seeing the decisions writers make; this, from a prompt, is delightfully original.
Thank you 🙏
So enjoyable from the very beginning, although once I realized the narrator was a dog in dire circumstances I wasn’t sure I could keep reading. 😭 So many lines to love, like this one: “It’s hard to make an impression on a world that seems only to value its own particular definition of perfection.” It reminded me of a book I loved as a child, “The Incredible Journey.” A bold choice, lovingly done.
I also loved the repetition of almost a chorus. I reads like a child’s fairy tale.
What a beautiful, layered tale of perseverance and courage. I love that you've taken on the perspective of a mother dog, and that she's led on her heart's journey by the other beings of the world. These paragraphs are filled with such lovely descriptions of the non-human world, which only make the human one feel even more bleak. Really well done.
Thank you Troy for your kind words and for taking the time to share them.
This was such a treat, so many beautiful moments; one favourite line :"just enough blue sky to make a pair of sailor’s trousers." I would love to see the prompt, and I would happily read much more of the same!
Thank you. I’m glad you liked it.
I love that one, too. It made me smile, so I read it a few more times.
Thank you Julie. How lovely.
I’m charmed by the originality and the echoes of a lifetime of children’s tales and children’s hearts, too somehow. What a creative contribution to this collection. Apologies for coming to it so late. I am still working my way - carefully- top to bottom. A pleasure to find yours.
Thank you Adam. Much appreciated.
The repetition of the forest animals saying "It’s the shortest day today and there’s hardly any light so you’d better be on your way" gave it the feel of a charming children's book, but with so much more detail and depth. Lovely story, well done!
Thank you Hannah. I’m happy you enjoyed it.
“She smiled so widely it was possible to imagine falling into such kindness and staying there forever.” One of my favorite lines. I also loved “just enough blue sky to make a pair of sailor’s trousers.”
Lovely choices here! Glad this project brought me to your work. And I’d be curious to see the prompt.
Thank you Holly. Much appreciated.